A bit of catching up to do...
- Here is a link to my first draft on vimeo- providing a better quality image. https://vimeo.com/86498383
A critical response to this first video:
0:00 - the opening scream is quite effective
0:03 - I would slow all of your footage down to match the tempo of the music and make the editing a little more adventurous. The opening shot is cut a little too soon. I would start the music with the opening shot.
I would also cross-dissolve between each shot.
0:08- Again, the shot is not held for long enough.
0:10- You don't need the blackout here
0:12 - Again, this will look better with the music if it's slowed down
0:15 - I think it should just be "Film 4 presents"
0:16 - You hold the credits too long. I think about 2-3s each is about right
0:25 - The credit here should be "a Film Freddy production"
0:37 - The credit here should have "Freddy Allen" on the second line and "a film by" in lower case
0:43 - Again, I would cross-fade to this shot and again go for a slower motion
0:53 - Just make this credit "Zoe Crick"
1:00 - not sure you need the fade through black here.
1:08 - you obviously need to add in a lot more credits
1:32 - I would keep the music going until the title comes down.
Don't forget to plan out and shoot the additional scene I suggested.
0:03 - I would slow all of your footage down to match the tempo of the music and make the editing a little more adventurous. The opening shot is cut a little too soon. I would start the music with the opening shot.
I would also cross-dissolve between each shot.
0:08- Again, the shot is not held for long enough.
0:10- You don't need the blackout here
0:12 - Again, this will look better with the music if it's slowed down
0:15 - I think it should just be "Film 4 presents"
0:16 - You hold the credits too long. I think about 2-3s each is about right
0:25 - The credit here should be "a Film Freddy production"
0:37 - The credit here should have "Freddy Allen" on the second line and "a film by" in lower case
0:43 - Again, I would cross-fade to this shot and again go for a slower motion
0:53 - Just make this credit "Zoe Crick"
1:00 - not sure you need the fade through black here.
1:08 - you obviously need to add in a lot more credits
1:32 - I would keep the music going until the title comes down.
Don't forget to plan out and shoot the additional scene I suggested.
- In response to these suggestions; this is the refined version of my final piece.(This is still only the interim final cut- as in my opinion some of the sound timings need fine tuning)
- https://vimeo.com/88447483
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